Just a word

I'm an amateur artist so don't take my suggestions to the heart, but I would love to critique the poem because it is just lovely, don't get me wrong the drawing is fantastic too!

Here is my critique:
The drawing in the background is a little dull, or is that how you wanted it? Maybe a bit more shading on the bricks in the background and maybe more bricks! And maybe make the girl have her head in her knees for more of an emotional effect. Or have tears streaming down her face!

Now on to the poem:
In poems you should usually not capitalize each line after a comma, semicolon, etc. now periods is a different story of course <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Wink)"/>
You have this:
Remember how we played our games,
Thinking it would stay the same
Loving, caring, smiling like
We didn’t even know goodbye.
Cheerful, innocent and carefree.
That is how it used to be.

It should be (corrections in bold):
Remember how we played our games,
thinking it would stay the same
loving, caring, smiling like
we didn’t even know goodbye.
Cheerful, innocent and carefree.
That is how it used to be.

That is all I see that is wrong, correct me if I’m wrong <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>
Vision is 4 1/2 stars because it has good vision but still lacks something.
Same goes with originality.
Technique points got knocked off for the capitalization, it just looks off to me :/
Impact is 5 stars because it packs a huge emotional punch <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/>